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The line graphs below show the number of hospital beds per 1,000 people, the percentage of patients who waited up to one month and those who waited more than one month for elective surgery in five countries in 2010, 2014 and 2018.

方法1：一圖一段

方法2（本篇文章按照此種分段方法）：

l Body 1：hospital beds availability

l Body 2：UK、Canada手術(shù)等待時(shí)間

l Body 3：Sweden、Australia、Mexico手術(shù)等待時(shí)間

開頭段

The line graphs compare the UK, Australia, Canada, Sweden and Mexico across two aspects (the number of hospital beds per 1,000 people and the proportion of people waiting for less than or more than one month for elective surgery) in 2010, 2014 and 2018.

概述段

Overall, the datareveals a negative correlationbetween the availability of hospital beds and surgical waiting times. Withhigher bed capacities, Sweden and Australiaprovided more efficient surgical carefor their patients.In contrast, people in the other three nationstypically experienced longer delaysfor elective surgical procedures.

思路要點(diǎn)：

- 床位數(shù)量與手術(shù)等待時(shí)長(zhǎng)負(fù)相關(guān)

- Sweden、Australia床位較多，因此手術(shù)等待時(shí)間較短；其余三個(gè)國(guó)家的病人等待時(shí)間較久

Body paragraph 1

Regardingbeds capacity,althoughCanada and Australiastarted with higher levels(5 and 4.5 in 2010), their figuresdecreased graduallyby 0.5 in 2018. The UKalsosaw a decline,butat a faster rate,reachingaround 3 by 2018.In comparison, the remaining twocountries recorded constant growth, with Swedenreaching4.5 and Mexicoamounting to2.8 per 1,000 people by 2018.

思路要點(diǎn)：

- Canada、Australia在2010年數(shù)值較高(5和4.5)→到2018年逐步下降了0.5

- UK數(shù)值大幅下降，2018年達(dá)到3

- Sweden、Mexico數(shù)值持續(xù)上升，2018年達(dá)到4.5和2.8

Body paragraph 2

Due to the reduction in the number of available clinical beds, the UK and Canadasaw a decreasein efficiency, with the proportion of patients receiving surgery within 30 daysfalling significantlyto merely 40% by 2018.However, the proportion of patients who waited longer than a month in these two countriesrecorded a dramatic increase,soaring to60% in 2018.

思路要點(diǎn)：

- UK、Canada

- UK、Canada能夠在30天內(nèi)做手術(shù)的病人比例顯著下降，到2018年達(dá)到40%

- 這兩個(gè)國(guó)家手術(shù)等待時(shí)間超過(guò)30天的病人比例急劇上升到2018年的60%

Body paragraph 3

In contrast, the other three countries demonstrated notable improvement in waiting times. The majority of people in Sweden and Australia were consistently treated within a month, with figuresrising modestlyfrom 70% to roughly 80% over the period. Mexicofollowed a similar trend, with the percentage of people receiving surgery in 30 daysclimbing steadilyto 60% by 2018.

思路要點(diǎn)：

- Sweden、Australia、Mexico

- Sweden、Australia大部分病人可以在30天內(nèi)接受手術(shù)，比例從大約 70%顯著上升到80%

- Mexico可以在30天內(nèi)手術(shù)的人數(shù)比例也上升，2018年達(dá)到60%

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